Personification

unnamedI participated (translate this as: lurked and wrote privately) in Jennifer Serravallo’s Summer Writing Camp for teachers. If you haven’t checked it out yet, don’t worry! Camp ends tomorrow, but you can find all of the video sessions posted in the related group on Facebook (The Reading and Writing Strategies Community). Watching the videos and responding to the prompts is time well spent.

During the second week of camp, Jennifer focused on Poetry.  On Day Two of that week the emphasis was on Strategy 7.4: Bringing Objects to Life.  She suggested that you choose an everyday thing to bring to life. She advised choosing an animal or something that moves, then listing the verbs related to it.  Next, she said to think of something similar that a person might do. Then work with these two lists to bring your object to life.  (Go to Facebook and watch the video for a much clearer explanation!)
Here’s my response:

Tiny Tyrant

He marshals his troops
into rigid columns
One by one
never marking time
they march forward
Beat by beat
coming ever closer
until
at the precise
designated
hour…
they strike!
With one prolonged, rousing
BLAST
they rip their victim
from deepest sleep
to weary surrender

Alarm Clock Victory!

©2018 M. Hogan

This week’s Poetry Friday Round-up is hosted by the warm, wonderful and wise Catherine Flynn at her blog, Reading to the Core. Be sure to stop by and visit!

 

28 thoughts on “Personification

  1. I wasn’t aware of the writing camp. I look forward to checking it out. I think you did a great job bringing your alarm clock to life 🙂

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  2. katswhiskers says:

    I do lover your poetry, Molly! This one is alarming. 😂

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  3. cvarsalona says:

    Now that is a poem with a great punchline, Molly. Thanks for reminding me about Jen’s camp. I did check it out once but need to go back.

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  4. lindabaie says:

    Ha! I was surprised and delighted. I tried hard at the start to imagine where you led, but alas, no good guess. It is a fun challenge, Molly.

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  5. Sally Murphy says:

    A very clever piece of personficiation, Molly. I especially like: “they rip their victim
    from deepest sleep
    to weary surrender”
    The camp sounds amazing .

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  6. maryleehahn says:

    I love me a good surprise ending! And your use of very short lines helped build the suspense.

    Dang alarm clocks. Tyrants indeed!

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    • mbhmaine says:

      Thanks, Mary Lee. I actually struggled a lot with the line breaks for this one. I’m still not sure about some of them, but was glad to get your feedback about the shorter lines working.

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  7. lol! What a great poem…..and that alarm clock is just gunning for me. I can feel it. At first, I thought you were writing about ants! I the journey of this.

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  8. Tabatha says:

    That sounds like a good Writing Camp, Molly. I hope you share more exercises!
    You did a great job building suspense and waking us up with that surprise ending!

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  9. I like the suspense and the martial feel to the short lines. The lack of remorse is very alarm-clock-like.

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  10. margaretsmn says:

    I love how your poem marches to the beat of ticking to the blast of the alarm. Like sleepy me, unsuspecting.

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  11. Well done, Molly! I had no idea what was marching “forward/Beat by beat/coming ever closer…” Alarm clocks are pesky things, aren’t they? Thank you for sharing, and for your kind words. 🙂

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  12. Donna Smith says:

    The short lines work well, and they get shorter as it nears the alarm. Loved the surprise ending! Then I had to go back to reread once I knew where it was headed. Well done!

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  13. haitiruth says:

    The alarm clock always wins… Ruth, thereisnosuchthingasagodforsakentown.blogspot.com

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  14. Oh what fun Molly, loved your suspenseful “BLAST” and “Alarm Clock Victory!” Thanks–you jolted me awake in my mid-afternoon slumber …

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