A Zeno

unnamedLike so many others, thanks to Margaret Simon‘s introduction and wonderful mentor poems, I jumped right on the Zeno train. The form was created by J. Patrick Lewis and consists of 8 lines with a syllable count of 8,4,2,1,4,2,1,4,2,1, with the one syllable lines rhyming. I’ve been playing around with it a lot in my notebook lately.

Last weekend as the sun rose, I spotted this lovely tree, brilliant in the midst of the frost-covered cemetery. It seemed a perfect fit for a Zeno. I’m still toying around with endings, but for now I’m going with this version.


O’er frosted tombstones, amber flare
surges upward
final flash of
doused too soon by

M. Hogan ©2018

This week’s Poetry Friday Roundup is hosted by the warmly welcoming Brenda Davis Harsham at her lovely blog, Friendly Fairy Tales. Thanks, Brenda!

35 thoughts on “A Zeno

  1. Oh how beautiful – we should all try to be that tree, filling the world around us with colour and joy!

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  2. What a beautiful flame of a tree in the midst of that cold and frosty cemetery. Yes, doused too soon. I think you’ve captured the spirit AND the law of xeno. Nicely done.

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  3. cvarsalona says:

    The first line is such a great visual, Molly. How unique the photo is and you captured it. Nicely done.

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  4. I love the contrast between bright and dark, both in the photo and the poem.

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  5. Sally Murphy says:

    ‘Amber flare’. Beautiful. And you are right – the form fits the subject perfectly.

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  6. lindabaie says:

    Oh my, that picture is stunning, and your poem captures it beautifully, Molly, love the ‘final flash’ & the ending ‘doused too soon’.

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  7. Very cool… love the format

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  8. margaretsmn says:

    I’m so excited that you tried a zeno! And what a beautiful photograph to write to! I love it. I especially like “amber flare” and “final flash.” Great way to extend a metaphor all the way to “doused too soon.”

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  9. Erin says:

    Nice cold weather poem, has a nostalgic feel to it.

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  10. S glad you jumped on the zeno train! This is beautiful. xo

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  11. Tabatha says:

    What a photo! I can see how that would be inspiring. You really ran with it. “Flare” is such an excellent metaphor on multiple levels.

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  12. jama says:

    That’s quite a tree! Glad you captured its beauty and wonder in your zeno (cool form!).

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  13. Your words go perfectly with the photo–love “amber flare.” Nice zeno!

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  14. Michelle Kogan says:

    Sounds like a rich old poem from long ago–but also so contemporary. Lovely poem and glowing trees–natures so inspiring–thanks for capturing it in your poem and image!

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  15. Debbie Lynn says:

    I love it!!! Especially love the glowing tree surrounded by frost. 🙂

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  16. Myra GB says:

    What a brilliant sight! Thanks for sharing your poem too!

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  17. maryleehahn says:

    What an image! Like all the memories from the grayness of the graves surged up to remind us of the lives they once were! Love your zeno!

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  18. Kay Mcgriff says:

    Just lovely–that photograph captures the trees brilliant fall colors and your zeno shines a light on it!

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